托福改革写作——官方模考写作新题型范文解析！

今天我们来看看官方的免费模考题（TOEFL iBT Free Practice Test）中托福写作部分的题。

题目：

Your professor is teaching a class on sociology. Write a post responding to the professor’s question.In your response you should:

• express and support your opinion 
• make a contribution to the discussionAn effective response will contain at least 100 words. You will have 10 minutes to write it.

Dr. Diaz

Over the next few weeks, we are going to look at lots of different materials about the role of television programs and television watching in people’s lives. But first, I want to know what you think about this topic. So here’s a question for the class discussion board: What do you think is the most significant effect that watching television has on people? Why do you think television has this effect?

Kelly

I know that one way that television influences people’s behavior is that when you are watching television, you are not moving around or exercising. This is especially true for children. When children spend a lot of time watching television, they have a greater tendency to be overweight.

Paul

I think the main effect that television has on people is to broaden their experience. There are so many programs devoted to nature and travel. Think of all the different places in the world you can experience through television! Last night I watched a program about life in Antarctica, and it was fascinating!

 
解析：

本题讨论的是看电视对于人们最重大的影响。和媒体相关的话题在托福独立写作中很常见，所以题型虽然是新的，但话题还是旧的。这道题即使不看材料中学生的思路我们自己应该也能想出不少可以说的点。

我们来看看材料中学生是怎么说的：

Kelly认为看电视会导致人们（尤其是孩子）缺乏运动，从而带来健康问题。

Paul认为看电视可以拓展人们的视野，比如通过看旅游节目，人们可以领略到世界各地的风光。

根据我们上篇文章的分析，你可以选择同意其中一方的观点，然后在此基础上增加论证的角度；或者你也可以提出自己的想法，比如看电视会让孩子模仿其中不好的内容，或者说看电视会让人脱离现实生活等等。

我们来看一下官方的范文。

官方范文：

中等水平的回答:

In my opinion, television makes the life more interesting and fun. There are so many interesting channels and programs, and they make people laugh during watching TV. I think this is a big effect that television on people, as time is passing by. Especially these days, people lives with the serious problems and accidents. People need something fresh and can entertain. Televisions do these kind of works very well. Through Music program, people can have relaxing time, through comedy program, people can laugh... and so on. Therefore, the television influences people's feeling much better, and I think this is very important effect!!

官方解读：

本文的分数在3分左右（原始分0-5分）。它提出了和材料中两位学生不同的观点：TV “makes the life more interesting and fun.” （不过从语法上来说其中的the是多余的），然后解释了为什么，虽然总体来说意思可以理解，但在内容上有重复，比如在结尾又说了一遍“people can laugh...” 有些句子的意思令读者困惑，比如“as time is passing by”意思不是很明确。而且基本上每句话中都有语法错误。因此得到这个中等的分数。

 
高水平的回答:

In my opinion, Paul is right when he says that watching television might broaden your experience. By watching for example science programs, you can gain valueable insights into new topics. On the other hand, I think that a high percentage of people don't watch TV to increase their knowledge. I am of the opinion that many people watch TV in order to get distracted from their real lives. They watch films or series to be entertained and to forget problems they have at work or in their private lives. At least for me this works well - for instance if I am sad, I watch a comedy or a funny soap opera and afterwards, I am in a better mood. Therefore, I think that being entertained and distracted is the most significant effect of TV.

官方解读：

本文的分数在5分左右（原始分0-5分）。作者没有只重复Paul的观点，而是给出了不同的观点：“watching TV is not mainly educational but rather a relaxing experience.” 然后作者解释了为什么人们需要放松，并举了自己的例子，其中提到了具体细节：为什么看电视（I am sad），看什么节目（ a comedy or a funny soap opera）等等。使用的句型和词汇也很丰富，几乎没有语法错误（虽然valueable拼错了）。

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